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This is called "Do your eyes still water". I just wrote it today. Guitar, second guitar/solo and drums. Second time singing. thanks for any feedback.

Lyrics

Do your eyes still water
the flowers I painted for you

Do your eyes still water
the flowers I painted for you

At least once a week
At least once a week
say they do

Do your eyes still water
the flowers I painted for you

If you do it on Sunday
by Tuesday they should bloom

At least once a week
say they do

This is my first time singing, or speaking maybe it is. I wrote the guitar part over the last week and bought a mic yesterday and recorded this last night.  It may sound sad but it does contain some happiness I think.

Lyrics

Pain pain
Go away
don't come back another day

Over there's okay

Pain pain
make your peace
go away
I beg you please

One more kiss
then I'm released

Free
Freed

This is just part of a song or idea i had and recorded today. I just recently started playing guitar (after having one a long time ago) and am interested in any feedback on songs I post... whether you think there is any thing to build on in a song or anything else. Thanks.